tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7346156995915382229.post4870305476898583705..comments2023-12-04T09:02:15.887-05:00Comments on world of Eradu: monsters Monsters MONSTERS!Dalehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15278656911112153722noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7346156995915382229.post-27794450112323437472021-03-03T22:08:29.578-05:002021-03-03T22:08:29.578-05:00lol -thanks! that is what I get for posting somet...lol -thanks! that is what I get for posting something before even the most cursory editing :DDalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15278656911112153722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7346156995915382229.post-45888394451563345572021-03-03T14:50:34.083-05:002021-03-03T14:50:34.083-05:00I really like these monsters!
Just a few notes:
...I really like these monsters!<br /><br />Just a few notes:<br /><br />Leaf Sucker<br />* diminuitive --> diminutive<br />* painful- it --> painful - it<br />(alternatively an em dash sans spaces)<br /><br />Maniywe<br />* peirced --> pierced<br />(although the sentence needs slight restructuring anyway, cf. pierced with deocrative pierces)<br />* prefering --> preferring<br />* engged --> engaged<br /><br />Mantipede<br />* change comma to semicolon after "reasoned with"<br />* lytics --> lyrics<br /><br />Many-toothed Angel<br />* intlligent --> intelligent<br /><br />Not sure if "Description" is necessary.<br /><br />Also, Save is once spelled "save" and once "Save".Ynas Midgardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14972628887096890642noreply@blogger.com